Yaroslav Savchuk,
Interesting points. I have to dissagree with you on your comment stating how the humans are not slaves, in my opinion they are slaves because they are held their against their will, and their rights are taken away. Also, they are used as hosts. Regardless, I like your point at the end explaining how pregnancy is a beautiful thing, it is indeed a shame that it is tainted in the story the way it is. Also, good job in pointing out how the mother was trying to protect her son. That is an important point because she has experienced this before.The short quote you chose has a strong meaning, since it is the first glimpse the reader gets as to what is actually going on in the story. Keep in mind to stay in MLA format.
Ekaterina Bentsa,
First Interview style post that I have read! It was nice reading what may have been Gan's thoughts after he saw the birth. The only problem I have with the interview is that although it is nicely done, Gan and his older brother already had a talk about the birth directly after it happened. It seemed that it was clear how Gan felt in the story, and also his brother's views were revealed. Either way, you ask good questions like "are the T'lic and T'gatoi equal". Clearly they are not, and Gan's explanation is enlightening. Make sure you are mindful of spelling errors, and I am not really sure how you would format this to MLA since it is an interview.
Week 3: The Black Box
Jordan Gilber,
I like that you researched to find out why the author wrote this story the way she did. It was definitely uniquely written, and that made it interesting. I am happy to find out that the story was actually tweeted instead of released traditionally. By tweeting it, I'm sure that the story was made available to a wider audience who maybe would have never read the story in the first place. The rectanges that she used to write the draft definitely resemble twitter boxes, like I read in the comments, so it is interesting that she released the story in a similar way.
Also, its interesting that the main character of "The Black Box" was actually a character in one of her previous works. Now that I know who the character is, I would like to read the other piece of work and maybe compare the two. If the black box actually lines up with the other piece of work that would be exciting.
Alex Varsik,
This analysis of the story is intriguing because after reading it, I can totally see how the author was trying to get to the audience. While reading, I had to really think hard on what each line meant. I even had to go back and re read what it said a few times over, just to make sure I got the full idea. I was basically just playing the game the Egan set up for us. I was reading it so I could figure out exactly what was going on, and by the end I realized that these directions could be for anybody, including me. Other than the fact that I am a guy, these instructions could lead me to being a really good spy. The citizen agent aspect of the story helps readers relate to it even further, since it implies that the orders are being given to another regular person, like the reader. I wonder how an ex spy would react to this story, I am curious to find out if they are related to anything he/she has seen in the past, or even recorded on their own.
Week 4: Semplica Girl Diaries
Jacqueline Lynch,
Interesting relation between the quote and your point about trying to reach the "American Dream". I like that because the quote says "what in the world was she seeking". She was seeking freedom and the opportunities that she deserved. I believe it is correct to relate the SG's to immigrants, since in a sense they are immigrants. People often come to this country to help people that they love, and often times it does not work out as easily as that. I'm not sure if you realized this while you were writing, but you drew the inference that many immigrants are being shafted, and used the SG's to connect that. Maybe the author was using this to mirror how immigrants are treated? Food for thought.
Yaroslav Savchuk,
Interesting submission because I also wrote an imitation and it was interesting reading yours to compare the differences. You completely wrote yours in the same style as the text, which is great. Every sentence and word choice is almost identical to what was shown in the story. You actually portrayed it as a journal entry entered by the author himself. On the other hand my entry was an entry written by me, so it varied slightly. You touch on great points about the authors grammar as well as his incompetence. Good relation by saying his incompetence is show when throwing the money away. All great points, but the point of an imitation piece is to write in the style of the text, and talk about the concerns yoyu have with it. If Grammar is your only problems then fine, but I think that there is much more that you can pull from Semplica-Girl Diaries, especially when analyzing the work as a whole. Overall, it was interesting and fun to read, nicely done. You definitely had great style when writing this piece.
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